I'll see if a second look yields anything, but on first glance, I agree with some of the other comments. Swap the places of 'Employment' and 'All The Academic Stuff', for academic jobs. Because it looks (to an outsider) like a fairly impressive number of of consistently-oriented credits (like in art, I expect the other end likes knowing what to expect from you), but only if they make it to them, and they may not make it that far. Slush readers make it through a page, at Best, for example. And it may communicate that you think of academia second, and 'real jobs' first.
And yeah, the intro could use some extension and streamlining as well. Fewer I's, more...something.
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Date: 2011-08-09 05:38 pm (UTC)And yeah, the intro could use some extension and streamlining as well. Fewer I's, more...something.